Imagine this, A surgeon finally walks out of the surgery room. Would you want the surgeon say “we gave everything we got, but…” or would you want to hear him say “The surgery was successful”. With competitions and work all around the world, the aura of competition revolves all around us. Who will become more successful? Who will fail? The two main factors that stand out, which is effort and result. But which one of these is actually more important? Let’s start by defining what effort and result means. Effort means being determined to achieve or accomplish a goal. Result means the outcome of something. Have you ever seen someone become famous because they put a lot of effort but fails, or someone that became famous because of what they did or invent. Effort is a precursor to result, but result is the actual thing that’s important.
hiking by Donald Palansky photography via Flickr CC BY 2.0
awards by dvpqewd via Flickr CC BY 2.0
In my experience, at the end of each semester, our school awards people with a grade point average higher than 3.8. Showing great effort, but having a grade point less than 3.8 will not contribute towards anything for the award. Another example is when applying for college, they look for personal achievements (results) not effort. Having great effort does not have any contribution towards college application.
In The Fish by Huang Chunming, the main character Ah-Cang shows effort in bringing the fish back, but with his careless attitude, he dropped the fish on his way home. Ah-Cang defends himself with the quote “I really did buy a bonito, but a truck ran over it and squashed it.” The grandpa immediately replied “Isn’t that the same as not bringing one home?” The grandpa’s quote clearly shows that without the result its the same as having nothing.
Mandisa the mirror at 26lb 8oz by Tim Creque via Flickr CC BY 2.0
To sum things up, giving one’s best would be pointless without having a satisfying result. Tons of people work hard to get good results, but only a few are recognized because of their top result.
1. The way you started your blog was very interesting XD By describing the trend and asking rhetorical questions guided me through the passage.
2. Your writing tone was pretty neutral, not very radical, which I think it benefits your blog because if people have the opposing idea from you, they won’t be offended. (like me)
3. The situation you wrote was quite persuasive. Even though I have different point of view from you, I did think about your point.
4. Overall your blog post was not too bad, but I think if you could relate this to the book “The Taste of Apples” it would be even better, since we’re currently learning from this book.
I definitely agree with your views on the two main factors and their order of importance. I think that your method of writing and addressing possible questions with rhetorical counter questions is a great way of expressing your ideas without actually stating them. The importance of the practical result is well presented to be the obvious choice here in this blog post. Finishing with an example such as a surgery being successful (results) and having tried (effort) triggers pathos and brings about more emotion to your argument. Overall a great blog post as well.