“Pokemon disrupt traffics” — 2016.9.3
Nowadays, you can see people playing Pokemon everywhere, on buses, in restaurants, at markets… But most frequently, while driving cars or scooters. The concept of this game is to move around to find and catch Pokemon. Many people decide to drive, so they can travel to different places faster. However, driving while swiping phones are dangerous, it may cause car accidents. What worse, some people will suddenly stop in the middle of the road, to catch Pokemon. One car almost bumped into the scooter in front of her, because he just stopped randomly. As you can see, playing Pokemon can affect or make other people’s life harder…
“Pokemon annoyed seven-eleven customers” — 2016.9.4
On Saturday night, around 9:35pm, seven-eleven was still crowded. You will probably think that there is a discount. But most people are staring at their phone screen, they are playing Pokemon. Some stood by the door, laughing and cheering loudly, blocking the entrance; some are next to cabinets, making it hard for customers to buy things. Not only customers were frustrated, seven eleven’s staffs are also not happy about it. They need to clean up all of the trash that Pokemon players had thrown, causing them to do extra work. One customer complained, “This is so annoying! Those people only focus on their games, they don’t even care about others!”
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